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Shalanie's Poem redone

Here you go. Redone. My gift to you. Original credit to Shalanie.

 

In the darkness that antagonizes before me,

With a candle glow,

People are dancing as the piano plays.

They listen as the wind breezes through their hair,

In the background,

You can hear clowns laughing in the dark.

Every person is clothed in black apparal,

And moving, densely, back and forth, back and forth, they depart.

Slowly, a graveyard appears in thin air,

A weeping willow blows in the wind,

And I am all alone.

In the dark, I am gazing at you.

The fog in the air is disarranging all around me.

The song stops,

And everyone dimly disappears.

Complete silence occured as I aquire a boa,

And flee through the dark shadows of the night,

With my glowing red eyes.

 

There. Easier on the eyes, full of emotion, and grammatically* correct.

 

*edit

 

 

 

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